I really liked your point about how the internet now provides for no excuse for ignorance. It then begs the question, were pre-internet people ignorant due to the fact that being informed wasn't as convienant? Also, does using the internet inherently mean that you would become less ignorant, especially when you consider that there are a lot of poor quality websites that oftentimes overshadow the better ones? The internet makes being informed easier, however ignorance is probabaly more due to cultural problems, where being uninformed is tolerated. The way to fight ignorance is to create a culture that doesn't tolerate ignorance.
I did have issue with one of the things you said about sparknotes. Can sparknotes actually replace The Lord of the Rings, or Harry Potter for that matter? I don't think sparknotes will replace books because there is a big metaphysical difference between reading something and reading about something. Reading a synopsis of a classic novel, or poem, or whatever can never replace just reading it. Maybe I'm wrong, but I disagree with you that our country is headed in that direction.
Other than that I liked what you had so far, it just needs more expansion on what you said.
I think its pretty well written and has strong vocabulary. It could use a little expansion of ideas-like explaining/discussing some ideas a little more, like in the third paragraph. You make some fairly interesting points, especially in the second paragraph about the instantaneousness & accessibility that has been provided by the internet. The opening is very well-written and really grabs your attention. Maybe you could add some quotes or references to the other articles we read as well to strengthen your essay.
Ok here is my Harris' Coming to Terms assignment done with your essay
Project Aim: Your aim seemed to be to express how the internet's inherent accessibility has changed (or should change) civil literacy Method: You illustrated how the internet's unique instantaneous qualities have changed news, and then equating that change with a change in civic literacy Materials: Quotes from Sullivan were used by you, showing how the internet has expanded journalism thus expanding literacy.
Keywords/Passages - "The greatest benefit the internet brings to the world of communication is two-fold: instantaneousness and accessibility" I felt was a good quote that described the characteristics of the internet very well. You also did a good job of employing Sullivan's quotes in your draft.
Uses and Limits - You did a good job at showing how the internet has unique characteristics that have affected journalism, and I thought your explanation of Sullivan's ideas were good as well. The obvious limits would be lack of evidence and expansion of ideas, considering how short the draft is.
I really liked your point about how the internet now provides for no excuse for ignorance. It then begs the question, were pre-internet people ignorant due to the fact that being informed wasn't as convienant? Also, does using the internet inherently mean that you would become less ignorant, especially when you consider that there are a lot of poor quality websites that oftentimes overshadow the better ones? The internet makes being informed easier, however ignorance is probabaly more due to cultural problems, where being uninformed is tolerated. The way to fight ignorance is to create a culture that doesn't tolerate ignorance.
ReplyDeleteI did have issue with one of the things you said about sparknotes. Can sparknotes actually replace The Lord of the Rings, or Harry Potter for that matter? I don't think sparknotes will replace books because there is a big metaphysical difference between reading something and reading about something. Reading a synopsis of a classic novel, or poem, or whatever can never replace just reading it. Maybe I'm wrong, but I disagree with you that our country is headed in that direction.
Other than that I liked what you had so far, it just needs more expansion on what you said.
I think its pretty well written and has strong vocabulary. It could use a little expansion of ideas-like explaining/discussing some ideas a little more, like in the third paragraph. You make some fairly interesting points, especially in the second paragraph about the instantaneousness & accessibility that has been provided by the internet. The opening is very well-written and really grabs your attention. Maybe you could add some quotes or references to the other articles we read as well to strengthen your essay.
ReplyDeleteOk here is my Harris' Coming to Terms assignment done with your essay
ReplyDeleteProject
Aim: Your aim seemed to be to express how the internet's inherent accessibility has changed (or should change) civil literacy
Method: You illustrated how the internet's unique instantaneous qualities have changed news, and then equating that change with a change in civic literacy
Materials: Quotes from Sullivan were used by you, showing how the internet has expanded journalism thus expanding literacy.
Keywords/Passages -
"The greatest benefit the internet brings to the world of communication is two-fold: instantaneousness and accessibility" I felt was a good quote that described the characteristics of the internet very well. You also did a good job of employing Sullivan's quotes in your draft.
Uses and Limits -
You did a good job at showing how the internet has unique characteristics that have affected journalism, and I thought your explanation of Sullivan's ideas were good as well. The obvious limits would be lack of evidence and expansion of ideas, considering how short the draft is.